Much better listing. Two changes to the images, which by the way look great. Take out the two drawings of the floor plan and the desk and add one of the driver's side with all the storage doors open (just like the passenger side) and if possible add a front passenger corner shot with the awnings out. You have images of the stainless steel wet bay and the Aqua Hot but where are they installed? Since you have room in the listing add additional images with the slides in and maybe the generator pulled out. If you can get up on the roof and take a few also as long as it doesn't detract from how good the rest of the coach looks.
Write up looks good just be careful getting technical. You might have a few prospective buyers who's eye's will roll back reading the list. Lot of owners out there who's technical knowledge might not extend much beyond filling the fuel tank and keeping the tires aired up. Anything you listed once don't include it a second time such as in your updates list.
Think of this as a job resume. Short, direct and too the point. If you want to add more info or images set up a website or even a Facebook page dedicated to the coach and add deeper details, images and such. Include a link in the RV Trader listing. Video of the engine and generator running, slides moving in and out, images of inside the cabinets,,,. Once away from RV Trader your options are limit by you imagination or how much you might not want to show.
If you do use Facebook there is a person who does pricing research and appraisals. I haven't used them as yet but the feedback has been good.
https://www.facebook.com/groups/RvPr...?ref=bookmarks
Good luck and keep us posted if you start getting hits.